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托福作文,细节需要刻意写

写作得高分的秘诀是什么?

 

找出合适的、清晰的、有质量的分论点,写出明白有理的让步段,其实归根结底都是为了让你写出足够充分的对观点的解释和例子,其实就是展现出足够多的细节。

 

细节说直白点就是:紧扣主旨句中的实词对其进行一轮又一轮地具体化

 

怎样才可以做到一轮又一轮对实词的具体化呢?

 

同学们在日常的练习中一定要学会对主题句进行提问,从回答中获得细节。

 

比方说,你要证明的TS是今昔对比题里面的科技发展:“网络可以帮助父母养孩子”,那么你解释和举例的时候就也需要今昔对比。可以说过去没有网络就不好带,现在有了网络就好带孩子了。那么接下来你要想继续展开下去就可以对这个句子中所有的核心概念进行提问。过去遇到什么问题?,父母怎么解决的?,过去的方法怎么不方便的?;然后再想现在有了网络,什么网络?网络里的什么功能?帮父母解决了什么问题?怎么解决的?把这些抽象问题你都具体化了,就是带有细节的好例子。

 

于是你的例子就来了:遇到要帮孩子完成学校布置的艺术史presentation的作业,过去父母只能依赖于自己的知识,但难免会有错,只能自己亲手帮着制作道具,也不是很完善,解决不了。而现在网络有丰富的教育资源和搜索引擎比如维基百科、知乎、google,父母可以帮助孩子在网络找到关于艺术的人物、背景和故事,还可以通过软件比如PPT\KEYNOTE制作多媒体的展示,孩子就能学到更多更好的内容。

 

再比如说:

你要证明的TS是听音乐能对孩子产生积极的影响。

First off, music has a healing effect that can serve children well.

 

那你就可以提问,什么孩子?本来怎么不爽的?学习压力大呀心情不好呀,那后来听了音乐,怎么爽的?怎么缓解压力呀心情舒畅呀,细节就来了。(你会发现细节要写的更充足的一大神器就是对比!)

 

First off, music has a healing effect that can serve children well. A kid who hates grammar would have trouble working on her English paper,  because emotions can have a huge impact on behaviors, especially learning performance. If she just had a bad day in school and ended up stressed out. And now she has an essay at hand, how is she supposed to concentrate? But things might change if she puts on some music. Turning on the tunes can help her calm nerves, relieve anxiety and even improve memory.

 

好的,看了这些你也应该累了,用下面的题目尝试着练一下吧!

 

 

1.  Do you agree or disagree: The government should invest more to arts rather than sports.

 

 

2.  Drivers should pay for a permit to be allowed to drive in rush hours in order to solve the problem of traffic congestion.

 

 

3.  Do you agree or disagree: It is better to spend money on traveling and vacation than to save money for the future.

 

 

4.  Do you agree or disagree: A job with a long vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but a shorter vacation time.

 

 

5.  Do you agree or disagree: Government should pay more attention to medical care issue than environment issue.

 

 

6.  Some companies provide important products or service, but damage environment. Some people believe that government should require more penalty, higher tax and larger fine of these companies, while others believe there are better ways. Which do you prefer?

 

 

7.  It was easier to be successful in the past than it is today.

 

 

8.  One of the best ways for parents to help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take the part-time job.

 

 

9.  Do you agree or disagree: In the modern world, we should never be impolite to another person.

 

 

10.A big party inviting many people is better than a party inviting merely close friends and family members.

 

 

11.The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers' salaries.

 

 

12. Do you agree or disagree: If people are on vocation (holiday), they should leave their mobile phones at home.

 

 

13.Younger school children (from age 5 to 10) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, language, science, and history.

 

 

14.Do you agree or disagree: Young people today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.

 

 

15. For a business to be successful, it must spend a lot of money on advertising.

 

 

16. Do you agree or disagree: Spending a lot of time watching sports on TV and following one's favorite team will have a negative impact on one's life.杭州哪里学托福好--首选杭州托福培训学校北美考试中心

 

 

17. Do you agree or disagree: The people in the past were friendlier than people today.

 

 

18. You job has a greater effect on your overall happiness than your social activity does.


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